Anyone want to critique my admission appeal letter ?

Hello, about three weeks ago I got denied into SDSU and decided to write an admission appeal. I have yet to hear from them but I was wondering if anyone was interested in reading my admission letter and maybe just giving me back some feedback. I’m pretty amxious right now and just kind of want to get a better feel as to whether or not my letter was any good. Thanks.

Do you have a valid reason to believe you were unfairly denied admission? If not, you are wasting your time. The college has a waitlist and if they are looking for more students, they will go there first. There will be an appeals process so look at that first before proceeding.

ETA: You already sent the letter. There isn’t a point in reading it now.