Anyone willing to give advice on extracurricular essay?

Applying to College Common and Coalition Application
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<p>Hi everyone,</p>

<p>I was just wondering if anyone would be willing to look over my extracurricular short essay. I am mainly concerned about the format of it. I am fairly sure that I was supposed to write it in this way, but I guess I'd rather be safe than sorry. If anyone responds I'd prefer to have it messaged directly instead of posting it for anyone to see. If you have any advice at all it would be appreciated.</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look if you want.</p>

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<p>thank you! I messaged you the short essay</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look as well if you want more feedback</p>

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<p>OK I messaged both of you. Thank you both so much! Definitely appreciate it :)</p>