Anyone willing to give feedback on my essay?

College Essays
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<p>The topic is:You are applying to study business in a competitive and intensive four year program. In 300 words or less (approximately 1950 characters with spaces), explain why you are an excellent candidate for the Queen's Bachelor of Commerce program.</p>

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<p>I can ........ my interest is international politics...while lots of my friends are interested in business ............. PM me if you want</p>