Anyone willing to proofread my appeal letter? Thank you! :)

[cinnabon1234]

<p>Hey, if anyone's willing to read through my UCSD appeal letter, PM me or reply to this thread! Its pretty short (only 250 words, thanks to the word limit) so I'd really appreciate it if people could give me constructive criticism. Don't be afraid to bomb the whole thing with negativity haha, I really want to improve it the best possible extent. Thanks y'all! :)</p>

[spatel23]

<p>for general feedback to those who want to help out:
Credit Goes to Ms. Sun!</p>

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Guidelines on Writing Your Appeal</p>

<p>Remember, telling the admissions office they made a huge mistake is not going to help you. For your appeal to be considered, you must prove that you are a much stronger candidate than what was presented in your application. Specifically, you must present new and compelling information that was not previously available to the admissions office. So if you failed to include information regarding extraordinary hardship or exceptional talent/extracurriculars on your application, you can discuss these things on your appeal as reasons for the UCs to reconsider you. Make sure you describe exactly how the exceptional talent/extracurriculars qualify you for UC admissions or how the hardship prevented you from achieving academically.</p>

<p>The focus of your appeal should be why you are an excellent candidate for the UCs, not why your hardship is horrible or why you have to get into the UCs. Your objective is to explain why the UCs should be interested in you, not how much you love the UCs. State your case concisely (one page appeal is ideal and two pages are acceptable) and don’t exaggerate or try to be dramatic. Keep in mind that the acceptance rate on appeal is less than 3% at Berkeley and UCLA, and under 10% at most other UC campuses.

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<p>So with that said, I’ll give it a shot
when would you like it by (is it urgent, or can i return it in a few days?)</p>

<p>Also, for this to work, I would also like a “copy” of some sorts of what you put on your application [so if you have done a chance me thread, that will be fine.], as well as your two essays. That way I can make sure what I am reading is “new and compelling :D”</p>

[candlelightkva]

<p>Accepted to Jacobs school of engineering, Warren College Honors Program. I can tots give it a shot! Have been doing it for my friends who are appealing, also.</p>

[chainiwatmj]

<p>I will! PM mee</p>

[insertusername1]

<p>I will too, send me a message!</p>

[iiBoGo]

<p>I’ll read it. PM me!</p>

[facepalm]

<p>I’ll read it :)</p>

[tenniscup12]

<p>i will ! if u still need help</p>