Appeal letter for academic dismissal Need Feedback

~I wrote it in kinda of a hurry,I still have time so I can fix any major mistakes

To the academic board committee,
I write this letter in hopes for appealing my dismissal from the University at Buffalo, I was aware of my poor academic performance in the first semester and during the mid-terms of my spring semester but my own pride and laziness prevented me from seeking help until it was too late. While I was not shocked by my dismissal, it came as a wakeup call that my bad choices may continue to haunt me for the rest of my life.

This past year, I had a very hard time keeping my grades up for a various reasons. I know that this is no reason for my grades being low, but I would like to explain the circumstances I was in that led to this. Before coming to the US I was diagnosed with type-2 diabetes and had to go into medication while the condition did not affect my ability to study, the stress from being diagnosed and the condition itself made me tired all the time. I was also very foolish for not researching the Computer Science major before applying to it because I thought my experience in web design would help me through but mid-way through the semester I realized I had very little interest and capabilities in that subject.When I got notified of my academic status of my first semester I thought that taking more courses and doing well in them would help increase my GPA, but due to my own stupidity I did not talk to my academic advisor beforehand which lead me to taking more courses then I could handle and I ended up performing poorly once again. Now I realize that I should have taken actions way earlier and learned from my past mistake that put me in this position to begin with. I sincerely regret my actions, and wish I could redo my mistakes.

After coming home this summer I realized that it was completely my fault that I could not succeed, so right after coming back to my home country I started taking measures and seeking treatment so that I do not repeat what I did last year. First thing I did was get my health checked up, and due to my diabetes I had a change of medication which would prevent me from feeling groggy all the time and that combined with regular exercise I believe I will have the focus to maintain my grades this coming fall semester. I am also getting counseling regarding my poor study habits, while trying to lead a more disciplined life. If my appeal gets reject I have also applied to local community colleges near buffalo so that I can keep trying to increase my GPA and eventually reapply to UB because that’s where I really love to be at. However if my appeal is successful I will use the universities resources to my advantage and seeking help with my studies as I prepare to pursue a major in biochemistry. I will also attend summer classes so that I can retake classes that I performed poorly in.

If I am allowed to return to University at Buffalo I will make my education my number one priority because I believe it is time that I start caring about myself and thinking about my future. The level of education and the friendly people I meet during my first year In University at Buffalo it’s not something I can really experience or find back home, so I sincerely wish for a second chance and I will show everyone I can do much better.

First and foremost, do a grammar/ punctuation check. You have lots of run on sentences and usage errors.

I’m no,pro here, but I think that what they’re looking for is:
A. A brief explanation of what went wrong
B. A brief explanation of how you’re planning to prevent it from happening again.

Condense the paragraph explaining why you messed up. It’s too long. Just get to the facts. You need to spend more time explaining how you will become a better student: I will met with my acacdemic advisor and discuss my major and what classes I need to take. I will meet with professors during office hours. I will attend every class and do every assignment. I will go to the tutoring center… Etc. Get rid of anything that doesn’t support your cause and how you hope to rectify the situation.

Your opening and closing paragraphs are fine. Streamline the two in the middle.

Thank you and yea English isn’t my first language so there are quite a few grammatical errors here and there

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Sorry to say this, but I think this will be interpreted as too little, too late. If they’re feeling particularly generous, they’ll offer to review your progress after a year of community college. Now, if your doctor wrote them a note explaining that your lack of academic progress was directly related to your physical condition, you might have a chance. But I doubt that was the case.

In order for them to take you even remotely seriously about biochem, you should have a history of strong calculus, strong chemistry, strong physics, strong biology, and statistics. If you don’t have the background that proves aptitude for this program, they’ll think you’re again being unrealistic and setting yourself up for failure.