Bad essay topic? (about stereotypes)

<p>I feel like this is such an overused topic, and I want the essay to be the best piece of my application, because it is how I can show the person reading my essay who I am.</p>

<p>I (basically) wrote about how stereotypes affect people. Kind of... Haha, I'm having trouble really explaining the subject. Maybe it's a bad sign.</p>

<p>Part of my 2nd paragraph:
"I want to be known for who I am and what I do before I am ever judged by how I look. But realistically, my appearance is what I am to onlookers. To them, I am not an aspiring student with self-motivation, passionately desiring to be a role model to my family. I am a pale-faced, blonde girl."</p>

<p>I went on explaining how my family has succumbed to their stereotype of alcoholism and drug addiction (I'm half native american), and how I wanted to be a role model for them and the youth of my family that what is expected isn't how it has to be.</p>

<p>Then I continued on to explain how I have proven to disregard that stereotype in my own life. Mainly in academics, how I've put myself in challenging classes that force me to not only to push my limits, but eliminate them.</p>

<p>My conclusion includes this:
"Now, based on my appearance, pale-faced, blonde, and female, one would never guess that I am half-Filipino, or that I come from a background full of addiction and struggle. I am not trying to be an exemption of stereotypes, but instead prove that stereotypes are a restriction that can be cast aside."
boo, I hate that last line.</p>

<p>This is completely unedited and I am not satisfied with the way it is written and I just wanted to explain my topic.</p>

<p>Do you guys think this is just a "run of the mill" topic? I want to stand out.</p>

<p>Thank you! :)</p>

<p>It’s a good topic. I think an obstacle you’ll face is how you present the essay.</p>