<p>I said that I was one that moves. I talked about how everyone around me is like a hamster on a wheel, being moved through a cycle in which they have no control of stopping. I say that I am moving against the wheel, desperately trying to beat the wheel, which is a figurative symbol of poverty. Lol I know it’s kind of weird.</p>
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<p>will someone read my essay? it’s not very creative but I think it reveals a lot about me as a person</p>
<p>I answered it sort of in the form of a narrative, with a short paragraph at the end that directly answers the question. From the responses I’ve come across online, the typical response seems to answer the question in a very abstract manner, philosophizing about the nature of people, actions, dreams, etc.</p>
<p>idk how you can be unique when everyone else is also trying to be unique… isnt it a flawed system</p>
<p>@psychedelia –
‘‘My essay showed my growth from an immovable child to a movable teenager to a moving young adult.’’</p>
<p>Haha!! Even I took a similar approach. Began with how I used to be immovable when I was young and then described an experience that made me movable - and how I’ve started exploring stuff now and moving towards pioneering… I also added on how I might be movable, but that doesn’t necessarily mean that I get swayed while making decisions… and added a philosophical touch to it! At the end of it all, I was happy with what I wrote. Only regret, I read Pg217 after I finished my essay - and was lazy to rewrite again! :p</p>
<p>@teenyoats - I think you’ll be fine, as long as your essay is strong and gets the point across and convinces the reader that you are who you say you are - and not someone else!</p>
<p>@Wallrus75 - You are mistaken. I agree, trying to deviate from the prescribed path is precarious - but if you are able to convince your reader, then there’s nothing wrong with this approach.
Look at it this way - Colleges(including Penn) want independent thinkers. On the other hand - they don’t want people who show off to be the creative types but who actually present hollow thoughts!!
Teenyoats says “I picked none of them. I said that I, myself, move. I don’t force others to move, and nobody else can make me move.”</p>
<p>^ That does fall in the category of movable but if Teenyoats feels strongly that he/she is not movable per se, she could have easily gotten that point across through her essay.And might I point out - you didn’t read her essay!!</p>
<p>Also, debating & MUNing experience has led me to believe that thoughts of great men are not the end all and be all. Any and every issue in this world can be seen from numerous different perspectives, with each perspective being equally right or wrong!!
Sure Ben Franklin is revered by UPenn alumni, staff & students but that doesn’t necessarily mean that they’ll hate someone who tries to differ from his opinion!! </p>
<p>^ But then again, this is just MY opinion and I am just another applicant(who will mostly get rejected, courtesy SAT/GPA)!!
I must say though, that the Ben Franklin essay was the most thought provoking one I wrote!!</p>
<p>All the best everyone!!</p>
<p>@rishav17: well, I was accepted ED… ;)</p>
<p>@ailad24: my story is not your story is not anyone else’s story. And even if they did sound similar, how I tell my story is different from how you tell your story and from how anyone else would tell a story. Sometimes I feel like half of what makes a good essay good lies with the execution.</p>
<p>whether you presented yourself as ‘movable’, ‘immovable’ ‘those who move’, all of them or none of them… What actually matters in a college essay is your content and style…</p>
<p>What you answer is hardly relevant</p>
<p>@psychedelia - Haha!! Hopefully I’ll meet you there!! 
If not for the “International Aid factor”, I would’ve applied ED to Penn!! :D</p>
<p>Mine was about skiing. I talked about my experience as a young child REFUSING to move because it looked too scary. I then made it about moving mountains and how I write to change the world.</p>
<p>I actually wish I had used my fourth draft (which was about the legacy of movement within skiing) because the writing connection was a bit off in the fifth (submitted) draft. </p>
<p>Oh well!</p>
<p>Just a general question:</p>
<p>Which of the choices (moveable, immovable, move) do you think was the “most chosen”?</p>
<p>I know that you most definitely should not base your decision on which word to write about based on this and I also realize that many people may have chosen some fancy combination (or chose none, for that matter), but I’m just curious.</p>
<p>I guess immovable would be the least chosen!! The other two should be on par!</p>
<p>But no way of telling that for sure!! :)</p>