Best CC essays

<p>In response to discussions about what makes good college application essays, I've decided to post some that I found memorable. The first was in response to a Chicago writing prompt about food. Please post your favorites.</p>

<p>By Addiena (Addiena) on Friday, October 17, 2003 - 01:16 pm:</p>

<p>Tres leches. Literally, three milks cake- a delightful amalgam of the condensed, evaporated, and full varieties, marinated dense over an airy divination of pineapple and yellow cake. To some, it is merely an after-dinner accompaniment to suitable libation; to me, it is so much more- a tangible representation of my heritage, a sort of gustatorial link to my family hundreds of miles distant. I eat it again not with the false nostalgia of a reinvented past but with the knowledge that one's history is a fluid and ever-changing thing. I eat not to recreate but to remember…
I am transported back to the streets of Calle Ocho, where white-hot headiness implodes in the sky and the euphony of drums accompanies lithe browned bodies gyrating in the night. I am in my grandmother's- no- Abuelita's backyard, at thirteen, trying desperately to mimic the other adolescents' steps that are seemingly unconscious in their execution. That summer there was always tres leches- for brunch after the aforementioned parties, as hospitality to Abuelita's friends, as filler when we sat on the porch and watched Elian Gonzalez sympathizers camping like refugees down the street. I empathize with synaesthaesia patients: when I eat, I inhale the cigar smoke and feel the unconditioned air and tongue the café con leche on the back patio. Yet my grandmother's voice is what I remember the most.
Abuelita's green eyes shone as she baked. "Come here, Yessica”, she would say, always with a "y". She only knew select phrases in English- "I love you" and "Bathroom" being two of her practicalities- yet she would stand for hours and elucidate to me a life story in her hushing blend of Spanish and Portuguese. I did not understand a word she said but to listen was comfort. She sounded like the personification of flowing water; the lines on her arms furrowing and branching about her like sleepy rivers.
Sugar incensed the house and she would sing: "Los soshpidos son aire, y van el aire/ los lagrimas son agua, y van el mar,/ ¿Así que me dice,/ cuándo usted adora alguien, dónde va?"
"What does that mean, Tia? Her song?" I asked my aunt one day.
"It means this. Your sighs are air, and go to the air. Your tears are water, and so fall to the ocean. So, you tell me," and at this, she paused- "When you love somebody, where does that go?"
I was thirteen when that question was scribed into my yellowed Garfield journal. It has accompanied me since- haunting and deep as a flashbulb memory, vague and frustrating in its possibility. Since then, I've tried to search for the answer.
One afternoon, my uncle invited Abuelita and I to a Key Largo country club where he worked as a janitor. It was unfortunate, because I was just at the precipice of discovering haves-and-have-nots; Abuelita, in her constant humbleness, blushed crimson at the wealth lavished before us. We tried to have fun on that beach, Anglo children startling at her stuffy blouse and heavy perfume. We did try.
"Do you have a green card?" A query from a waiter, imploring under the blue umbrella.
Abuelita blushed again. "I am not resident."
"That's not what I meant," he scoffed, hurrying away with a dessert cart. I looked at the contents- yes. Tres leches was there. Insult to injury.
After she got home and tore away to Mass I stood there in the kitchen, trying to somehow know her beyond time. Then, blindly, I began to make dessert- unconscious and precise, with the kind of strength that inhabits mothers saving their children from death by heavy machinery. When she got back and saw me sitting at the table, a pan of tres leches gracing my lap, she dropped her rosary to the floor and cradled my face in an eternal moment. We didn't need to say any words, Abuelita and I. We didn't need to.
Years later, after she was gone, I tried to recreate tres leches for a dinner party of my uncle's. It was a disaster; the night ended awkwardly. I didn't know why I couldn't do it.
My uncle was quiet as we drove home. "Jessica, what have you learned here?" he asked me.
It took me a second to realize what he meant, but then his intention dawned. He had understood!
"I think, my dear Tio," I finally replied, "that now I know where love goes."</p>

<p>That truly is an excellent essay!</p>

<p>This was another memorable essay, though imperfectly written. I like the writer's very individual voice, and am very impressed at her ability to write in English after only three years. The essay captures very well the problems of growing up in an immigrant family. That final sentence is heartbreaking for a parent to read.
The prompt was: "If I you had ten dollars and a day to spend them, what would you do?"</p>

<p>Hhboyji (Hhboyji) on Friday, October 08, 2004 - 12:31 am: Edit</p>

<p>I'm bad writer. Moved to states three years ago without knowing English, I tried my best to be where I am now. But I still lack great deal of writing skill, and I'm worried sick about JHU essay. If you guys can take your valuable time and read it through, and of course give me some feedbacks on it (doesn't have to be positive), that would be greatly appreciated.</p>

<p>thank you.</p>

<p>With ten dollars in my hand, I am planning on doing something daring, so bald, that will knock people’s socks off-watching a movie with my dad. Ok, maybe it doesn’t sound so scary or appalling. But it surely does to me, since I have never tried that ever in my life.</p>

<p>I will go to the Blockbuster across the street, and pick up $7.99 previewed movie, the ones with actions rather than romance, the kind of movie he likes to watch. At least I think he does. Then I’ll pick up however many numbers of popcorns I can buy with what’s left of ten dollars, to have something to stuff in my mouth just in case things get awkward or too quite.</p>

<p>It goes long way back, me and my dad. I don’t ever recall going to a movie theater or even having a friendly conversation with him. It’s always been about either my grades or how I could be better in every things I do. Sure, we’ve done some things together, but they were all by obligations, not for our enjoyment as a father and a daughter. Thinking back, we’ve given nothing but feeling of hatred and disappointments to each other, regardless of what our real intentions were.</p>

<p>We yelled and screamed. I cried and hated him. He demanded, I obeyed. He asked, I answered. I remember the endless days of crying and being depressed. So isolated and lonely, I even thought of doing something extreme. I believed I hated him, and couldn’t wait to leave so I wouldn’t have to see him everyday. But lately, things have gotten little different.</p>

<p>First, there is tennis that he started teaching me. He might be a unkind father, but a wonderful teacher. We run, swing, sweat, and sometimes laugh. Also, there is my car, Toyota 4Runner, loved by both my and my dad. We talk of engines, car maintenance, and how better my car is than my mom’s Elantra. I feel like I finally found ways to bond with him, but it’s almost time for me to leave.</p>

<p>With ten dollars in my hand, I am planning on doing something daring, so badly that it’s going to knock my own socks off, not to mention my dads’. I will sit on a couch next to him, translating movie words by words, scene by scene. Maybe we will laugh, and I wouldn’t have to stuff popcorns in my mouth to break the silence, instead it will be for my enjoyment. There’s no guarantee that it’s going to work, but maybe, this ten dollars will open a new beginning of relation between my dad and me. Just maybe.</p>

<p>Another great essay by RaspberrySmoothie 10-13-2004, 03:23 AM<br>
The Best Essay You'll Ever Read on CC
Just kidding.</p>

<p>1000 words. An experience that has influenced you.</p>

<p>Comments? Criticism? Let me know:</p>

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<p>I have a sneaky suspicion that I’m fooling everyone when it comes to running. Oh sure, I seem experienced, with my knowledge of slow-twitch muscle fibers and advice on fartleks. But when push comes to shove, I collapse in a mess of near-asthmatic wheezing and gasping.</p>

<p>My parents were actually mildly surprised when I decided to take up cross-country in the first place. I had never shown any inclination toward sports, except maybe ping-pong. The truth is, I desperately wanted to be an amazing athlete. I saw them: the bronzed and muscular athletes in Sports Illustrated, on the beach, in the airport. They always had an easy gait, a graceful posture- oozing with confidence and empowerment. I wanted to be like that too.</p>

<p>But, no matter how hard I tried, I always ended up slowing to a walk. Part of it was the burning sensation in my legs. Part of it was the ripping ache in my chest. But mostly, it was the sight of the slowest, most out-of-shape girl on the team ten paces ahead of me. It was so discouraging. How could I be such a phony?</p>

<p>“Nonsense,” my coach dismissed. “It’s all mental.” I understood perfectly: you had to be mental to take up running.</p>

<p>The meets were the worst. That was when I was forced to mingle with the real runners: the tall, lanky girls who threw around phrases like “PR” and “split time” in everyday conversation. The most ironic part was that they usually started the varsity boys’ teams right after the junior varsity girls. This meant our boys would inevitably catch up with me in mere minutes, yelling encouraging things like “Let’s go [Raspberry Smoothie!” and “Longer strides, [Raspberry Smoothie]!”</p>

<p>“Well, why don’t you just quit?” my skinny, athletic sister wanted to know after one brutal track meet. (By this time, I had somehow gotten bullied into signing up for winter and spring track as well).</p>

<p>I stared at her incredulously. “What? Don’t be ridiculous,” I said.</p>

<p>Of all my running experiences though, I think I hit my lowest point in the winter of tenth grade. On this particular day, I was running the mile on an indoor track. The cowbell rang, indicating that the first girl had only one more lap to go. In a desperate attempt to reach the girl in front of me, I sped up my pace. I don’t think I had any concept of time in the agonizing seconds that followed. All I could recognize was the pitying looks on my teammates faces and that damnable, black silence in the gymnasium.</p>

<p>I finished without any cheering or fanfare. It wasn’t even a relief- just a humiliation.</p>

<p>“What was my time,” I muttered to Coach [X]. [X] had been named All-American in ice hockey when he was younger, and ran the New York City Marathon every year. Rumor had it, he ran with his boys during practice and often outran them in their seven or eight mile treks.</p>

<p>Coach [X] stared at me. “Time? What time?”</p>

<p>My own coach had forgotten that I was running in the race.</p>

<p>“Never mind,” I told [X]. The very same night, I switched sports to intramural ping-pong.</p>

<p>But somehow, every sport I took afterwards always came back to running. In basketball, we were first evaluated by our mile times. Our field hockey practice when it was too cold to play outside? A three-mile run. It seemed I would never escape running.</p>

<p>This summer I worked in Washington DC as an intern.</p>

<p>“Hey [Raspberry Smoothie],” my dad said enthusiastically. “There’s a great running route on [X] St., right next to the office. Four miles, goes right onto the boardwalk. I bet you’ll wanna give this a try?”</p>

<p>“Yeah, that’s just what I was thinking,” I said.</p>

<p>So I gave it a try. It was difficult not to, with my father (and his camera) waving in the distance. I told myself it was just to keep in shape. And I would stop as soon as I was out of sight.</p>

<p>And I did stop. But I looked at the runners around me: some of them fast, some of them slow. I began to feel a nagging itch, a guilty sensation about stopping. So I started again.</p>

<p>The next day, I did it again. There were so many senior citizen runners who passed me, I figured there must be an early bird special somewhere on [X] Street. But by the time I finished my run the day afterwards, I knew I had no more choice in the matter. Inexplicably, I was hooked on a running cycle again.</p>

<p>My family soon learned not to ask about times or mileage. Instead, they asked about how it felt, what I saw. And the truth was, it wasn't bad. I liked what I was feeling. I liked what I was seeing. There was no pressure to keep up with the faster girls, no coach yelling to pump my arms more, not even an angry whistle indicating poor form.</p>

<p>“What’s the matter, [Raspberry Smoothie]?” my sister asked after I snapped at her one day. “Miss your morning run or something?”</p>

<p>I turned to her, ready with an angry retort. But I surprised myself. “Yeah,” I said. “It feels really weird not starting off the day with a run.”</p>

<p>That was last Tuesday. I’ve already ordered some new running gear for this school year. I figure I’ll use some of the old cross-country routes, maybe explore a little if I’m ambitious. Not every day, just three or four days a week.</p>

<p>But just to keep in shape, you know. Not because I really love it or anything.</p>

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<p>Wow, what an essay (by Addiena). Good enough to be published!! I had read RaspberrieSmoothie's essay too.</p>

<p>bump! any more?</p>

<p>My son posted one over on UChicago--the infamous mustard essay. Ask a question about giant jars of mustard, get a reply about enlightenment and condiment homeostasis. :p</p>

<p>Man, what about my essay? LOL</p>

<p>I talked to the woman at duke who read my application and she said it was hilarious and it stood out. I guess you guys are harder graders lol.</p>

<p>Hi, everyone, my son was accepted under Early Decision to Columbia University-Class of 2009-yeah!! Below is the "personal statement" essay he submitted:</p>

<p>I constantly go back. First I feel blessed, then angry, then amused, then contemplative. Right now I'm contemplative, I guess. My thoughts again drift to shattered glass and a sudden flow of water. They reenact the fear of complete loss of control and perceive, once again, that I am where I think I am, harnessed, hanging upside down, in a ditch. My brain constantly shifts the events together in a different order, the "what ifs" and the "whys". It's not just my brain either, my body is in on the game as well. My body is the one responsible for the uncontrolled spasms when another car gets too close. My body is the one that can still feel the dread in its muscles. They work in concert, body and brain, to put me in that place where I am experiencing the same moment in time, repeatedly, in full color, slow motion, with the sound on mute.</p>

<p>I am driving home from visiting Brown with my friend, speeding a little but mostly keeping up with traffic. The guy in front of me is much too slow for my liking, time to change to the middle lane. Right signal on. Glance in the mirror. Make the move. White SUV out of nowhere. *<strong><em>. I need to get out of the way now. I need to slow down. *</em></strong>. I'm out of control. What's going on? OH MY GOD. I'm alive, right?</p>

<p>I am so tempted to chalk this whole experience up to fate. I want the ease of saying that it's all part of some grand scheme. I want to store it in a neat little box in the back of my brain. Twenty years from now I want to take the box, look at it and say: "That's when I learned to never go faster than 60 miles an hour and to aways wear a seatbelt". But that's such a lie. I guess I could say that was a lesson learned, but it can't be the whole lesson and it's certainly can't be that simple. By trying to force some contrived meaning on it, I am undermining the gripping fear and reducing the anger to a mere anecdote. </p>

<p>It is so easy to take our most defining moments and put nice, neat, over simplistic meanings on them (and usually so much more comforting as well). What is infinitely harder (for me anyway) is to interpret experiences with our whole self and accept that you may never reach any real conclusion. The unsafe feeling of jumping into the unknown is what life really be about. Forget the search for meaning, why don't we search for the experience? And, just maybe, in that experience we will find some meaning. While car crashes may not be the ideal way to get to that place, it is how I got there.</p>

<p>"Where I am, I don't know, I'll never know, in the silence you don't know, you must go on, I can't go on, I'll go on". (Samuel Becket).</p>

<p>Not a student essay, an essay by Gurcharan Das on Liberal Arts for India Times. Posted on the Indian student thread....and reprinted here for marite:</p>

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We have had an unusually long spring this year. It is over now and so is the frenzy of board exams. It is not surprising that thoughts of the young have turned to romance. But not for long, for one has to think of a career and making a life. Millions of young Indians as they leave school and head for college, ask: should I study science, arts or commerce? 'Making a life' is different from 'making a living', and I'll recount my own experience as I answer that question, not for any other reason but because one person's life, honestly captured, is not only unique, but is the only certain data of history that we possess as human beings. </p>

<p>When I was 16, I got a scholarship to an American college when it was fashionable to go to England, especially to Oxbridge. Like the diligent son of an engineer, I began to study engineering. Inspired by Crick and Watson, who had recently discovered the DNA molecule's shape, I switched to chemistry. During the summer, I came back and saw for the first time India's grinding poverty. (One has to go away sometimes to notice these things.) Hoping for answers, I switched to economics in my second year. A few months later, I was enticed by the humanities — by courses in Greek tragedy, Islamic history, Russian novel, and Sanskrit love poetry. I wanted to study everything but I couldn't of course. So, I did the next best thing. I switched to a joint major called History and Literature. </p>

<p>By now, my parents in India had begun to despair. My mother didn't know quite what to tell the neighbours. Adding to her discomfort, I discovered two new temptations at the end of my second year. I was attracted by philosophy but also by the visual beauty of Bauhaus buildings. So much so that I seriously considered becoming an architect. In the end, two moral philosophers, John Rawls and Isaiah Berlin, prevailed. I wrote my thesis on Aristotle and graduated with a degree in philosophy. </p>

<p>Apart from being a thoroughly confused young man, what this story tells is how a liberal education is a search. One shouldn't feel that one has the answers. It is enough to know the questions. My unusual college allowed me the freedom to search for what I wanted to be. My parents too were patient and didn't pressure me to do "something useful''. Our system in India, alas, doesn't allow for such experimenting. You are called a duffer if you are doing the Arts here — it means you didn't get into engineering. </p>

<p>My confusion didn't quite end there. </p>

<p>I still didn't know what I wanted. So, I took a year off and a job selling Vicks Vaporub. And like the man who came to dinner I stayed on. I rose to head the company, and at 50 I took early retirement to become a writer. At first, not having an MBA proved a drawback, but later I discovered, oddly enough, that my liberal education was an advantage. Writing essays had taught me to think and write clearly. I had a better understanding of human motivation for I had consumed vast amounts of literature. Stoic philosophy offered a refuge in my many adverse moments. Most of all, my liberal education had given me confidence in my own judgement, and this often allowed me to be innovative. In the end, it matters less what one studies in college and more that one acquire the right attitudes. Without realising it, I had built a self in college, and I could cope with life's ambiguity.

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<p>That is a great essay Cheers. I do always tell my son to go to college and build a "self" or an identity for oneself.</p>