BRO, help me out

<p>I've had an english teacher read my common app essay and she says its good but needs to be about 20% shorter. Can someone with some experience help me with this? Post here or PM me. I obviously don't want anyone to rewrite it, but I being that I wrote it I feel like everything should stay while thats obviously not the case. I need someone else's perspective here. Let me know Bros, if you accept I'll give a little bit more info ! DANK</p>

<p>I'll take a look at it. Maybe you can glance over mine and tell me what you think, too. PM it to me.</p>

<p>i'll give it a try.</p>