BU Supplement Essay Help/Advice

Hi!
I am applying to Boston University for the fall of 2017. I am currently a college student planning to transfer, and would really appreciate some feedback on my supplement essay, as well as my common application essay. I want to create an appealing essay that stands out to the application viewers, and one that isn’t like the typical boring college essay. They are both near completion, so if anyone would be willing review my essay, please comment below and I will PM you!

Thanks!

Disregard, wrong forum page.