Can any parents help me edit/revise college admission essay?

<p>I'm a first generation college student of foreign parents. They can't help me much. PM me please if you read my essay, thanks in advance.</p>

<p>Statement of Purpose: REQUIRED (saved -not submitted)
The statement of purpose will provide an opportunity to explain any extenuating circumstances that you feel could add value to your application. You may also want to explain unique aspects of your academic background or valued experiences you may have had that relate to your academic discipline. The statement of purpose is not meant to be a listing of accomplishments in high school or a record of your participation in school-related activities. Rather, this is your opportunity to address the admissions committee directly and to let us know more about you as an individual, in a manner that your transcripts and other application information cannot convey.</p>

<p>Hi Sobe – PM your essay to me. Is this the only essay you’re concerned about? I’ll take a look and respond by tomorrow. I’m a parent and I like to write.</p>

<p>Yes, it’s the only essay required. The usage of my verb tense is pretty bad.</p>