Can anyone give me a quick read before I submit this essay?

<p>250 word "why I chose my major" essay (business). I really don't like it and I kinda rushed because I really need to get these applications in, since the schools they're for use rolling admissions.</p>

<p>Any takers?</p>

<p>Sure, I'll read it.. I want to major in business as well (concentration on finance and accounting)</p>