Can anyone give suggestions about my essay?

College Essays
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<p>I did my first essay for University of Maryland, College Park, and I was wondering if anyone here would be willing to read through it (limit is 300 words, so it's not very long) and give me suggestions on how to improve it. Right now, I feel like the ending is a bit awkward. Post below if you want to see it and I'll PM you the essay.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>I’ll read it, but can we swap essays?</p>

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<p>sure turntables, would be happy to</p>

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<p>bump. can anyone else read my essay? i’ll be happy to read other peoples’ essays as well</p>