<p>Okay? I was never closed, and not accepting what people were saying. I was not accepting that people were questioning the qualities shown in my essay, because they have never read it, including yourself. “Ok, I’ll think about it”, but the even I talk about is a single event of my father hitting me two years ago. I don’t describe it too much, and I make it clear that it’s not still happening. Do they still have the responsibility to contact state authorities?</p>
<p>CiaoRagazzi - I feel for you and it is difficult to know what the content of your essay is about. My master’s is in EdPsych and I work for a nonprofit. I would be happy to read your essay privately and tell you a) does your personality shine through without the essay risking negatives with the admit readers; and b) is there content in there that I think could risk having authorities called. I have no idea how to exchange email addresses without everyone seeing them. Someone else might know. I can review anything today which might still give you some time. I will help you in whatever way I can – I understand the stress you are under and appreciate that you have already written what you think could be a great essay and starting over is not ideal. Let’s take a look at the essay and see if it is that risky after all.</p>
<p>CiaoRagazzi - Yes - I just found out how. You can click on my name and "send me a private message. I’m in California so lots of hours still left in the day.</p>
<p>Thank you 
youre awesome.</p>
<p>Everyone - just an FYI that I read CiaoRagazzi’s essay and provided feedback. If he/she rewrites the first part of the essay, it will avoid any potential DCFS obligation issue for the colleges, and honestly, the essay will be stronger. The second half of the essay does a great job at explaining how the “issue/incident” changed his/her life and what he/she then did to make things better. It should be a strong essay when the first half is edited. Thanks for everyone’s feedback.</p>
<p>Thank you 10char</p>