Can somebody please read my common app essay?

College Essays
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<p>I was wondering if anybody here could do me a favor and proofread and critique my first common app essay. I'd really appreciate your honest opinions.</p>

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<p>bump .</p>

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<p>Sure. Pm it</p>

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<p>Sure thing</p>

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<p>Thank you guys I’ll send it over</p>

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<p>Sure send it over</p>

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<p>sure id gladly take a look.</p>

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<p>Sent it, thank you.</p>

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<p>PM me and I’ll help you!</p>

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<p>Sent, thank you</p>

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<p>I’d love to help you out!</p>

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<p>I’ll help you out.</p>

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<p>Sent .</p>

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<p>Yeah sure, PM me!</p>

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<p>I can definitely !</p>

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<p>Sure i’ll help you out!</p>