Can someone comment on my essay please??

Colleges and Universities A-Z Massachusetts Institute of Technology
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<p>Hi again! I have written the first essay for MIT and I definitely need some comments. I have written on a topic which is definitely a hard one. If someone wants to help me, I can send my essay on msn, my address is <a href="mailto:maniac_cr@hotmail.com">maniac_cr@hotmail.com</a> . Thanks a lot. =)</p>

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<p>b u m p</p>

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<p>pm me ur essay then</p>

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<p>PM me your essay as well.</p>

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<p>sorry namkim and mognoose but can u first tell who u are? =)</p>

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<p>I'm a senior in high school. Qualifications-wise, well I am a writing tutor, but that's about it. I've already applied EA to MIT, which means I can't do another essay, so there's no danger of me copying you, if that's what you're worried about (And if even if I was a RD decision candidate, I write my own essays).</p>

<p>I'm just offering to give another viewpoint. If you don't feel comfortable with me looking it over, that's perfectly fine as well.</p>

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<p>uhh im a senior in high school.</p>

<p>i already turned in my mit app.</p>

<p>is that what you wanted or do u want more?</p>

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<p>yep its ok thanks :)</p>

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<p>I sent it back. Hope that helps a little bit.</p>

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<p>thanks mongnoose =)</p>

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<p>your comments have been really hopeful =) good luck by the way.</p>

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<p>sure....ill read nd gve my comments!!</p>

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<p>PM me ur essay...I will try to help u to my fullest.</p>

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<p>i'm a senior applying RD, but my mit essay just needs a bit tweaking and it will be done. i've critiqued ~40 essays so far, so i guess if you really need an affirmation of my abilities, you can pm those people (find them in my posting history).</p>

<p>basically, pm me if you trust me and i'll help =)</p>

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<p>Please email it to me adnan(dot)esmail(at)gmail(dot)com</p>

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<p>hey i'm a senior from new hampshire, applied EA
if anybody wants editing, you can email your essay to <a href="mailto:slcampbell@exeter.edu">slcampbell@exeter.edu</a>
i'll do my best to give helpful feedback</p>

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<p>I too can help with your essay. Feel free to PM it to me.</p>

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<p>i'll read your essay and give feedback</p>

<p>i'm also a senior. i already applied RD to mit so you don't have to worry about me stealing your essay or anything. i really like reading and giving feedback on essays. i've been editing essays for a while, so feel free to PM me yours.</p>

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<p>pm me ur essay too if you want....i've alreay applied ea and ive prety much written all my essays for my other schools already.</p>