Can someone please read/critique my essay about my culture?

College Essays
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<p>I just finished writing an essay that needs A LOT of critiquing, please do not hold back! Any criticism is appreciated :) </p>

<p>Btw it's for UCF and the prompt is: How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are?</p>

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<p>I’ll read it!</p>

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<p>I’ll read it too! Pm me!</p>

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<p>I’ll read it too!</p>

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<p>Sure! PM it to me and I"ll. suggest changes :D</p>

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<p>Sure man. Send it over</p>

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<p>Not applying so I can read it if you want</p>