Can someone please read my Common App essay?

<p>My prompt's this: A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.</p>

<p>And then since I'm applying to UC's, I'm trying to use the same essay for this prompt: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>

<p>I’ll read it if you want. PM it over.</p>