Can someone *quickly* read my EC essay (150 words) to see if I'm on the right track.

<p>Hi,</p>

<p>Since my main common app essays and supplemental essays cover my main ECs, I decided to talk about another EC for the actual essay that asks you to talk about one of your activities. Could someone (no '14ers, I'll check your profile) please look at it for me super quickly just to tell me if it's a load of waffle or not?</p>

<p>Thanks</p>