Can someone read my cornell essay and give harsh criticism?

Tell us about an engineering idea you have, or about your interest in engineering.
Describe how your ideas and interests may be realized by “and linked to” specific resources within the College of Engineering.
Finally, explain what a Cornell Engineering education will enable you to accomplish.
Thanks! Have a great day.

@confidential12 :

I’d love to critique your essay! Message me.

I can read it.