Can someone read or advise me on this essay?

College Essays
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<p>I'm from the UK, so for a start, I find it a little bit more difficult to 'grasp' quite what the right feel for the essay is.</p>

<p>So far this is 3 paragraphs, basically missing an intro and a conclusion, but I'd like someone to read it and tell me where they think it should be going, and if maybe I should just scrap it or approach it from a totally different angle.</p>

<p>If your interested it probably going to be a supplement for Yale, and maybe adapted for Princeton.</p>

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<p>PM me. I'll have a crack at it</p>

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<p>Thanks v much, anyone else out there. I know it's the holidays, but use it as an excuse to escape the wrath of your grandmother for 10 minutes, come read my essay!</p>

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<p>i'll read it, i'm not very good correctig detail grammar mistakes, but i think i can give some comments about the overall structure.</p>

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<p>I will =). I'm international, as well.</p>

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<p>i'd love to help</p>