<p>Thanks in advance if you do</p>
<p>I'd post mine, but the image is so bad I can hardly make parts of it out.</p>
<p>edit: here they are anyway, pretty large if you aren't on broadband... As you can probably tell by reading it, the essay was pretty rushed, as I read the starting time wrong and had 6-7 extra minutes after I was done.</p>
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<p>Looks like a pretty good essay to me. You took both sides of the argument though, I didn't know you could do that. Everyone who took test prep courses said you need to stick with one point, for or against, and stick to it. I guess they were wrong about that. I think you did a good job though. Was that a 12?</p>
<p>11</p>
<p>Tencharacters!!11</p>
<p>Here's my 11..finished with about 10mins left over. I will copy it verbatim because i doubt you all can read my handwriting.</p>
<p>"In a nation founded upon the principle of majority rule we have come to grips with the notion that the largest group holding the same ideals usually are afforded the right to have their ideas take place. Even in our highest levels of government, on the floor of the house; legislation is passed with a sample "yay" or "nay", the majority winning this contest.
However, we must ask ourselves if the majority is always right. The notion that the earth was the center of the universe was held dear to peoples hearts for millenia until the voice of truth and reason of figures like Copernicus, Kepler, and Galileo threw these ideas out the window and brought reason and experimentation into logic. The people before them who favored the geocentric model were not at fault, but were jaded by the majority of their predecessors holding this idea. Thus, we come to the influence of the mob. Humans have always looked up to "great" minda and figures and espoused their same views. However must we not examine underlying variables as to why this claim or decision made? Many times the majority is led astray by the one unwavering leader who holds his beliefs to be true even in times of misunderstanding and clear proofs that contradict his or her opinion.
In a society of majority rule, the minority are often oppressed by the majority and their effortless control over society. Can we not see a clear example of this in the antebellum south? White slave masters, the majority, had full control to dictate the lives of their African slaves. The African Americans had no protection of the minority (i cant read this part well) or legislation saving them from persecution. Instead, they were the result of a flawed system where the majority is the ONLY voice. There must be an equilibrium point in which the majority as well as the minority have a voice in the matter. If not, the majority becomes the supreme dictator over all facets in which there are opposing groups, and this belief is not one espoused by this nation of majority rule."</p>
<p>Honestly, i thought it was one of the crappiest essays i have ever written but for some reason they liked it enough to give it an 11...</p>
<p>Look over my essay in "Essay that received wrong grade". What did you do differently that I didn't? I somehow get the feeling that my scantron-chopped off conclusion was the reason for my bad grade. Oh well, time to get a re-grade.</p>
<p>All I can say is...I feel sorry for whoever read my essays. Haz, I'll post my conclusion up for you. I dont' think it was the scantron.</p>
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<p>I got a 12, but I can barely read it, so I doubt anyone else can.</p>
<p>Anyway, I pretty much pandered to the audience with my 3 points. I knew English teachers were going to read it so I used a classic literature example (Aldous Huxley's A Brave New World), a contemporary example that actually effects teachers (No Child Left Behind act) and something against Bush's Social Security reforms (well, that has nothing to do with this).</p>
<p>I erased alot, so when they copied it, I could barely read it.</p>
<p>I scored a 12 on my essay. My thesis was based on the quote "tyranny of the majority." Then, I wrote two body-paragraphs on the structure of American government (and its creation based of Federalist Papers 10) and also the Civil Rights Movement (majority most conservative part of society...white people hoarding power...blah). Conclusion was excellent and talked about majority censoring voice of people. Linked it nicely to intro and body paragraphs. </p>
<p>I think you were supposed to use three examples, but I just used two strong ones and got a 12, so don't always follow the status quo (or the majority) when writing for the SAT!!!</p>
<p>Oh...yes...I should also note I had Monty Python references (however vague) in mine. Either they didn't catch it, or they didn't take off for it. It was so perfect. I couldn't resist.</p>
<p>(I got an 11)</p>
<p>Type it out. The link doesn't work</p>
<p>Or take a screenshot or save the image. We'd have to be logged in as you to see the pic.</p>
<p>Haz, no jokes, give it up already.
You can get full marks without a conclusion.</p>
<p>Nah, I'm not.</p>
<p>You might be right. I never did say this was a 12 essay. I said it was a 10.</p>
<p>The link doesn't work. No joke.</p>
<p>The majority, what exactly defines the majority? Is it middle-class America or peasant filled France of the 18th century? It is both and both of these groups should be able to rule. The majority feels the suffering of every class and makes the best decisions to accomodate to all. The majority should make decisions in government because their decisions will reflect the feeling of how the nation feels; and absolute power corrupts absolutely.
One great example of why the majority should rule is the French Revolution. The members of the 3rd estate made up 98 percent of the country but were only getting 1/3 of the vote. The commoners or the majority yearned for equal rights and representation in government. These principles which 21st Americans take for granted were fundamental rights that every citizen should have. This majority was absolutely correct that government by a few will corrupt and this government should be terminated. Orators like Robspierre (sp?) urged for equality and this is exactly what "the people or the majority deserved. Majority rule allows for equality among the classes and a republican form of government. Without majority rule the interests of the people will be neglected and the privileged will be the only beneficiaries.
"Absolute power corrupts absolutely" is a very good quote when it relates to pre-revolutionary France. Louis XVI misused his power and did not care one bit for the starving peasants. He instead enjoyed the excesses of the royal life by consuming ten times as much food as the peasants did. Louis XVI like many other French monarchs practiced corrupt policies routinely and therefor undermined the Crown. Though he did not sell offices as much as earlier monarchs, he did still sell offices. The French monarchy had always been corrupt and solely because they had an absolute monarchy. No one force stopped the government from controlling all the power. So the monarch did not disperse the power at all. Overall the monarch needs to freely exchange power with the people or the government will become corrupt and ineffective.
The French monarchy when finally taken down ushered in a new era of government. This government was republican and filled with equality among the classes. No longer in theory did a few hold the power in government. Now instead the sans-culottes and other commoners dominated politics. This swift change made government much less corrupt and a lot more effective. Now the government was "for the people, by the people" and it urged other republics to form. Though the majority may not always make the best decisions it sure will echo the believes of the common man.</p>
<p>Feel free to abuse it. I honestly do not believe it was particularly great please grade it yourself and be brutally honest.</p>
<p>Hm, I'd give it a 6. Some points could be improved on, but it's only a draft.</p>
<p>11</p>
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<p>Kudos on the nice handwriting! I'm sure the graders appreciated that.</p>
<p>However, how is your essay significantly different from mine? We used different examples, but provided a lot of background information for my examples. Many people on the board criticized this. I don't see why. We wrote in similar manners (check out our writing styles). However, my essay got bombed by half of CC and received an 8. Though I think they are untrue, the same comments CCers made about my essay could be made about yours.</p>
<p>Still, I think your essay is great and really did deserve a 11. I'm not detracting from it any way. (I thought mine deserved a 10-11). The whole grading criteria makes no sense. Subjective, subjective, subjective.</p>
<p>i wondered why i got an 8, but i can now understand. all of you who received 11 or 12 wrote clearly better essays. I personally think Haithman's was the best because of great intro, great examples, and smooth transition. It was interesting, too.
anyways congrats</p>