College Essay about mission trip

So I wrote my essay on my mission trip to Guatemala.
I know it is a very cliched topic, but I focused my essay on something else other than helping people.
I do not want to reveal too much about my topic here,
but is there anyone who would be willing to look at my essay and give me some advice and critique?
I really want to hear other people’s honest opinion about my essay,
because I do not really want to risk my chance by writing a boring essay…

Thanks!