College Essay Critic

<p>I've just finished my final draft for the common app. Could anyone please have a look and possibly critic my writing? I would be extremely grateful to whoever would spend the time to do so. I am open to any suggestions, knowing how important the college essay is, and that it is my last shot at the college applications process.</p>

<p>Grateful,
monsieurmikee</p>

<p>Anybody willing?</p>