College Essay Criticism Needed, Please!!!

[alexandralubaev]

Can someone please read my college essay! I’m trying to apply to Texas A&M University and would like some constructive criticism. Please comment or PM me if you can help.
Thank you so much!

[brijetz17]

I will read it

[linds248]

I can read too!

[Hamlin]

Likewise

[mandapadanda]

Ditto