College Essay Issues

<p>I've been struggling writing the beginning of my college essays.
I wanted to talk about my mothers struggles and how it influenced
me to go into medicine and pursue it rigorously by finding and internship
and working hard to get publications.</p>

<p>I also wanted to talk about how I don't fit the normal Asian society
because we are considered technically low-income and I don't talk
to many Asian people in my community..
I just feel different and I don't know how to convey it..</p>

<p>You guys are a great! =] </p>

<p>please help me with this</p>

<p>Write about the revelatory moment when you were distraught by your mother’s condition, when you realized you couldn’t save her, but that she could save you: when you realized her condition could give you purpose, give you the impetus from which you would build you life: it would compel you to teach yourself medicine, a discipline through which you would find fulfillment.</p>

<p>hm, you know what I don’t get - kids seem rushing into internships, and keen to get their names in publications, before they even have a rich grasp of the field. They specialize before they have a developed capacity to decide what they want to specialize in. This seems sad to me. Maybe I am wrong, though.</p>

<p>Really, you can write your essay anyway you want without a reduction in quality. Talk about the caterpillar that was adhered to your leg or something. Write about how it was your mom, and how you had to pluck it off (leave her behind, research medicine) to save it (to save her), and how that was difficult.</p>

<p>Wow that sounds really nice…I feel like I don’t have the ability to give justice to her story with the way I write. It sounds so much better when I say it rather than write it… </p>

<p>But you gave me great ideas of how to start it! </p>

<p>Thanks =]</p>