Common app transfer essay- can someone give me some feedback?

<p>I wrote an essay for UofM and I have some big questions in terms of what direction to take it. Its a 250 word minimum, and I am currently at 410. Should I bring down the word count? Should I develop the intro or tie it in more with the rest of the essay or simply scrap it? Are the reasons for transferring sufficiently explained? Overall, just some feedback would be great</p>

<p>It should be around 380-420 words. Although there is no limit for this prompt (only a minimum) anything more and the essay becomes mess and wordy. Send it over it you want me to look over it.</p>