Could someone critique my UChicago supplementary on history?

College Essays
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<p>If anyone is willing to critique it, I would be happy to pm it to you. I am struggling to relate the essay back to myself. Thanks</p>

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<p>I can read it for you!</p>

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<p>Alright, I just sent a pm to you</p>

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<p>Hm, I didn’t get the PM. You can share it with me on Google Docs if you want.</p>

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<p>i’d like to read it for you.</p>

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<p>I can read it</p>

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<p>Careful, it seems that you need to clear space in your pm folder for me to send messages to you, so I just shared it with you on google docs</p>

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<p>I’d love to read and provide my comments. PM me.</p>

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<p>I’d love to read it for you</p>