Could someone proofread my essay?

Is anybody willing to proofread my 300 words essay and give me some feedback/critique? I’d email your my draft and really appreciate your help!

Sure, I can help. PM me the link. I’m new to the site, but I want to help others.

Thank you so much!

@bbbao9980 common wisdom on here is to send your essay only to adults with proven posting histories. It seems you may have already sent yours to the new poster, but for future reference…