Could you help with my essay?

<p>Hey, I'm not great at writing essays, but i've written two and was wondering if anyone could proofread them and tell me where I could make improvements to better help me get into a Good school? Thanks</p>

<p>i would be happy to read and comment. just pm it to me</p>

<p>i'll read it</p>

<p>pm it to mee</p>

<p>pm it to me..i have all night to look over it</p>

<p>anyone else?</p>

<p>me can, if you want :)</p>