Critique for first college essay appreciated, especially someone from Stanford

College Essays
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<p>If someone would be willing to take the time to read my Stanford supplement essay (actually the first I've written), I'd appreciate it greatly! Thanks!</p>

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<p>Hi senior, I couldn’t respond through a pm because your inbox apparently is full. The email address you pmed me got its host name cut off blahblah@******** Thanks!</p>

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<p>i’d be happy to give you feedback!</p>

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<p>I’d be glad to read it, PM me :)</p>

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<p>Sure. I’ll read it. PM me</p>

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<p>I would be happy to take a look. I have a B.A. from Stanford and a J.D. from Harvard. Since joining CC, I have provided essay comments on 72 drafts for 35 students. If you would like to get started, PM me!
JP</p>

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<p>I’ll help take a look. :)</p>

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<p>PM me, I’ll be happy to read it.</p>

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<p>PM me - I will give you feedback.</p>

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<p>I can take a look for you, just Pm it over.</p>

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<p>Hey mate, I can look it over. Just make sure you give me the topic of the supplement so I have a general idea of what you are talking about.</p>