Critique my atypical common app essay please!

College Essays
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<p>Whoever's down for reading and giving me critique on my common app essay, please post below! I'll PM it to you. </p>

<p>Disclaimer: I'm only sending it to people who have already graduated HS, because I want feedback from people who have already experienced the college app process.</p>

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<p>bump!!!</p>

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<p>I’ve experienced the application process twice now (transferred). I’ll take a look at it for you if you’d like.</p>