Critique my Caltech essay?

College Essays
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<p>Can anyone please critique my Caltech Essay? The prompt is</p>

<p>Interest in math, science, or engineering manifests itself in many forms. Caltech professor and Nobel Laureate Richard Feynman(1918-1988) explained, ''I'd make a motor, I'd make a gadget that would go off when something passed a photocell, I'd play around with selenium''; he was exploring his interest in science, as he put it, by ''piddling around all the time.'' In a page, more or less, tell the Admissions Committee how you express your interest, curiosity, or excitement about math, science or engineering. </p>

<p>Before answering this question, you might ask those around you - family, friends, or teachers - how they see you as a mathematician, scientist or engineer. They may offer insightful observations! </p>

<p>Thank you!!</p>

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<p>if you're still there, I'll do it!</p>

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<p>Bump 10char</p>

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<p>BUmp plssss</p>

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<p>sure, i can read it although it is long past the deadline. at least we've both submitted.</p>

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<p>interesting topic, can i read it ?</p>

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<p>Nice Topic. Can I Read It? PM it to me.</p>

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<p>^^I too applied to caltech and I would love to read it!</p>

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<p>I'll check it out.</p>

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<p>i’d like to see it too, can u plz send it to me?</p>