Critique my UC Essay for Prompt #1

[letitenfoldyou]

<p>I need some people to read and critique my essay. Preferably people that are already attending a UC campus. Thanks!</p>

[ichthuscypher]

<p>sure just PM me =]</p>

[hrhcow]

<p>ditto above.</p>

[aoballer008]

<p>pm me as well ill take a look</p>

[ideuler]

<p>I'll be applying to UCB and UCLA. i'd love to give feedbacks-;</p>

[Angljc1]

<p>Im applying but as a transfer. Ill take a look, just pm me.</p>

[MooseCatcher]

<p>I'll read it and give you some feedback.</p>

[Tetsu]

<p>I will be glad to help pm me!</p>

[movieburner125]

<p>I'll read it</p>

<p>PM me</p>

[Grain]

<p>I'll read it.</p>