<p>I wrote an essay about how my family's impacted me and what i want to do but my dad says that's "pedestrian". I thought about writing another essay on how I'm inspired and blah blah blah and how i want to serve the world OR how i want to open a restaurant chain. </p>
<p>Which should I use?</p>
<p>well, it seems like the one you wrote first answered the prompt the best (this is for the personal essay, right?) and you don’t have a lot of time left, so unless you can write an amazing essay in less than 4 days, I’d say go with the first one.</p>
<p>i still havnt even wrote the first one yet!!!</p>
<p>deerhotch- there’s only one.</p>
<p>@butterfly: gracias para tu asiste a me</p>
<p>any other opinions on which i should use?</p>
<p>shouldnt the personal essay be like, the story of your life ?
or is a\it about whatever I want ?
dont be nervous I also havent started it !</p>
<p>I agree with butterfly.
I just talked about myself and sort of what I want to do with my life…</p>
<p>theres 2 essays one ask you what you want ur advisor to know about you the other asks whats the best advise youve been given?</p>
<p>I think the personal essay is to talk about yourself and your life and what you want to do bur Im dont sure, and I REALLY want to know, anyone has any clue ?</p>
<p>rad-in-plaid - go with the one you’ve already written - that sounds like just what they’re looking for. You are writing about yourself, your family, and all that has had an impact on your life so far - sounds just right to me, and you’re answering the question. Good luck!</p>
<p>I personally think the restaurant topic sounds interesting… Just imho here.</p>
<p>@Rad-In-Plaid96,
Assuming they’re both well written, I’d go with the one about the restaurant chain because its quirky and will stand out.</p>
<p>My d wrote this essay as well. She interpreted the question to be what her goals, hopes and expectations were for boarding school. She wrote a little on what influences made her the person she is today but bascially focused on things that would help her advisor understand her personality. I just looked at the prompt again and it does frame the question in the context of what would be “valuable for your advisor to know about you”. This comes after the sentence that defines the advisors role as “guiding your academic choices and serving as a personal counselor”. So I think maybe D interpeted this question more narrowly.</p>
<p>It took away so much of my creativity, but if you think about it, there is actually a lot you can write. just make it as interesting as possible. i think more people should reply to this post! the deerfield essay is always talked about. Also, they have TWO essays right? I know on the paper version they do… what about online?</p>
<p>The second one is a short answer, i have the paper right here.</p>
<p>@ifax: I haven’t written the second yet but could do so b/c of extra snow day. I don’t feel that it would go with the essay though since it’s asking about me and not only about a proposed plan for the future. I only ask because i want it to stand out. Unfortunately, i have no Lifetime story to tell</p>
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<p>Sheesh - does it have to be that important? Can’t you just write, for example, that you always sleep through your alarm, so if the advisor happens to be walking by your room in the morning, couldn’t he please pound on the door for you? Or that you tend to overcommit, so if he notices you signing up for six sports and student council, it might be time to step in and talk to you? I mean, isn’t this just a way of showing the various sides of you?</p>
<p>(As always, please take the above suggestions with a grain of salt. I am not, and have never been, an AO - and I also don’t have to write one of these myself!)</p>
<p>I agree with dodgersmom (also not an AO). Make it fun and it will be easier to write, and easier to read. Compare yourself to a bowl of soup, write it as a play, describe yourself as a fantasy superhero with some bizarre and silly superpower. Just make sure it says something about who you are, not just a reiteration of your list of accomplishments. Good luck all, try to enjoy the process.</p>
<p>@dodgersmom:
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<p>that was a half joke. I meant how there was no cliched hardship that shaped my life and would make my essay stand out</p>