<p>Hi,</p>
<p>I was recently deferred and was wondering if I should bother writing a letter. In the defferral letter they suggested that I send seventh semester grades and standardized test scores.</p>
<p>I am going to send them my seventh semester grades and an updated transcript (when they become avaliable).</p>
<p>Do you think in addition, I should bother writing a letter.</p>
<p>If so, how is this draft. If you wrote a letter, please post it so I can see how it compares to mine.</p>
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Dear Admissions Committee:</p>
<pre><code>Since visiting XYZ University in September, 2005, it has been my number one school to attend in Fall 2006. It became my number one choice because of the great collegiate environment in a great location near my hometown. . I also liked the fact that XYZ University is a smaller school with a student body thats not predominantly from one geographic area. I also felt that it was an environment that would let me go beyond the boundaries.
Since a child, I have always wanted to be a physician. While many other universities (both public and private) offer great pre-medicine programs, I felt XYZ University has one distinct advantage of having smaller class sizes and professors that were top-notch. I feel that these two advantages are vital in performing well on the MCAT and for having a complete understanding of the subject.
When I originally submitted my application in August, 2005, I didnt include my list of college courses I am taking. By maturalication, I will have 46 college credits. All these courses were taken while during a full high school workload. Once available, I will forward a copy of my seventh semester grades and an updated transcript reflecting my seventh semester grades. Also, I am including my updated resume which includes my additional achievements and activities since August, 2005.
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<p>Thank you for your consideration.</p>
<p>Your 3rd paragraph is the important one. I would provide a brief opening statement that you wish to be considered for XYZ, then move on to what is now the third paragraph. Your description of why XYZ is a good fit is coming off as generic at this point and, IMO, will not help your case. </p>
<p>I believe that sending an additional rec is common - maybe from one of your college instructors, or an EC coach?</p>
<p>Good luck with the process. Take this opportunity to re-evaluate your list to make absolutely sure it is safe overall and you will have good options come spring.</p>
<p>Well, I already sent them 3 teacher recommendations (they only wanted 2). I have can easily get 2 more excellent teacher recommendations. I will update my letter and repost it.</p>
<p>The first two paragraphs made me want to quit reading. I'm glad I didn't, because the third paragraph finally said something that couldn't have been written by half the applicant pool. I'd skip the first two paragraphs and cut to the chase with the third paragraph after a brief acknowledgement for still bing considered, something like ... "Despite being deferred into the regulation decision pool, XYZ U remains my first choice and I am excited that my application is still under consideration. When I originally submitted my application, I didn't include..."</p>
<p>A cover letter is another opportunity to help them get to know you and be able to picture you there on their campus. Don't bore them, don't waste their time telling them what they already know, keep it brief but interesting and do keep them updated on any new information that would help them decide that you need to be there in the fall.</p>
<p>Despite being deferred into the regulardecision pool, XYZ U remains my first choice and I am excited that my application is still under consideration. When I originally submitted my application, I didn't include my list of college courses I am taking. By maturalication, I will have 46 college credits. All these courses were taken while during a full high school workload. </p>
<p>Once available, I will forward a copy of my seventh semester grades and an updated transcript reflecting my seventh semester grades. Also, I am including my updated resume which includes my additional achievements and activities since August, 2005</p>
<p>Thank you for your consideration.</p>
<p>Do you think this will be adequate. This is a small/mid-size private university (not Ivy).</p>
<p>Your "new information" is lost in the verbiage of the "great collegiate environment" and MCAT stuff. The "near my hometown" part caught my interest, though. If there is a reason why you need to stay near home (as opposed to you just want to stay near home) -- finances, help with family, etc. -- that is something worth expanding upon.</p>
<p>PLEASE use spell check before you send it out...you mispelled matriculation both in the first and second attempt. Spell check is your friend :)</p>
<p>sorry, our posts are crossing in cyberspace -- we're out of sync. Yeah, I like that better, again if you need to stay near home, that could be new and relevant info. Send a transcript from the college too.</p>
<p>Is "maturalication" a word? Do you mean matriculation? It would be REALLY bad to have a misspelled word in your letter.</p>
<p>I would also suggest you say something about why you see yourself at this particular university, just make it unique, don't just tell them that they are a smaller university with great teachers- they already know this. Tell them why you are a good fit for their institution.</p>
<p>yes, your right it is matriculation. I will work on it some more.</p>
<p>Yeah, I was going to send them a college transcript, but all they do is list courses like</p>
<p>PLSC 2101 A
BIOL 1406 A
BIOL 1407 A
etc.</p>
<p>So I created a spreadsheet which I included the full course titles, grades, and total credits. </p>
<p>I will include it anyways though.</p>