[Desperate!]Can Some PLEASE help critique my essay?

College Essays
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<p>It's for Johns Hopkins ED and I need someone to critique it really bad! it's only 500 words so...:D</p>

<p>And if you would like, I can look at urs ;)</p>

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<p>Since you gave me good advice, I’d love to help you out as well!</p>

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<p>I’ll swap with you, you can read my Stanford intellectual vitality essay, I need to know if it’s too ridiculous.</p>

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<p>sure send it if you’d like</p>

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<p>thanks guys :D</p>

<p>i think that’s enough readers for me :)</p>

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<p>Here’s some professional advice:</p>

<p>[Reed</a> Magazine: My Essay](<a href=“http://web.reed.edu/reed_magazine/autumn2006/features/my_essay/what_to_say.html]Reed”>http://web.reed.edu/reed_magazine/autumn2006/features/my_essay/what_to_say.html)</p>