Essay feedback needed please (uiuc)

<p>i need some feedback on my essay.
( i need some help shortening it; i am at 400 words)</p>

<p>The prompt is:
In no more than 300 words, tell us something about yourself that isn't covered elsewhere in this application, some interest or experience of yours that you think the University of Illinois should know about as part of the admissions review.</p>

<p>please let me know if you are interested in giving me some feedback</p>

<p>Thank you so much : )</p>