Essay Help Please (Again!) :)

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<p>Heyo CC, been a while since I've posted here (since failing my Jan SATs Hmm..)</p>

<p>Anyways I'm here with a couple of essays again and would really appreciate if you could spend some time to read it and comment :D</p>

<p>So here goes: </p>

<p>Essay 1:
Is it important to question the ideas and decisions of people in positions of authority? </p>

<p>With the fall of communism came the burgeoning of democracy. However just because democracy is the favouring of the choice of the majority, should we not question the people in authority? No! I personally believe that in the modern day and age, it is even more pertinent that we constantly question the ideas and decisions of the people in positions of authoriy and examples to corroborate my stand is pervasive throughtout the world today. </p>

<p>Back in 2006, then Taiwanese president, Chen Shui Bian, came under fire after being accused of laundering as much as NT700 million from the people and was subsequently sentenced to a life time in jail. Prior to investifations, people have often suspected how he could afford a myriad of luxuries but brushed aside these suspicions as they trusted that democracy was right. However what they failed to see was that democracy often breeds corruption and thus one should constantly question the people in power to keep their actions in check.</p>

<p>Secondly, this is also true in the scientific world. It has long been accepted that the speed of light (approximately 6.0x10*23m/s) was the fastest on Earth, unrivavled by any substance known to man. This was the rule that Einstein set in place decades ago. However, just 2 years ago, a scientist in America discovered a faster molecule, Neutrino, that led to a watershed in Physics, also shattering the fundamental rules set in place by Einstein. If we were to accept all these rules and laws, not constantly questioning their basis, humans would no doubt face a bottleneck in development. Thus for the improvement of ourselves, we should question these ideas and decisions. </p>

<p>Lastly in the world reknowned novel - The Animal Farm by George Orwell, we see an example of an oppresive regime where the Pigs, led by Napolean, were able to chase away their former rulers, the farmers and assume the throne of the farm. One would assume that this would mean better lives for the animals, however, the Pigs became hungry with power causing the animals to suffer even more. This was due to the placating of the animals via the pig Squeeler that fed propaganda to the animals, thus pacifying them. If they were to question the authorities, it is without a doubt that the animals would have led a less oppresive life. </p>

<p>In conclusion, one should constantly question the ideas and decisions of the people in authority to prevent oppresion, corruption and stagnation.</p>

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<p>Essay 2:
What are some crucial qualities of a leader?</p>

<p>Since time immemorial, our world has seen the rise and fall of numerous great leadrs. Some who have succeeded and gained much fame and power, and others that have gone unheard as time races on. However, the debate on what exactly are the most crucial qualities of a leader still remains highly controversial. By analysis of reknowned leaders, I personally beleive that a leader has to have foresights and visions for the future to lead his people towards that goal. Also he has to be influential enough to move the masses and lastly have a strong sense of justice. These qualities are pervaisve in the myriad of leaders we’ve seen. </p>

<p>Firstly, back in colonial times, it was people who had visions for their own countries who were able to step up and shine through as leaders of the nation. Take Lee Kuan Yew from Singapore for example. Having witnessed the ruling of Singapore by the British colonial rulers, then later the oppresive rule of Japan as “Sayonanto”, Lee Kuan Yew decided that enough was enough and fought passionately for the independence of Singapore. He had a vision, a strong one at that, for Singapore to be able to stand on her own two feet as a nation to fend for herself. Eventually, Lee Kuan Yew was able to fulfill this foresight in 1965. Similarly Gandhi was also able to liberate his people from colonial rule, all because they had the vision to help their people.</p>

<p>Secondly, in the case of Martin Luther King Junir. He was reknowned for his oratorical skills all across the world, most notable for his speech “I have a dream”, where he preaqched of the unifying of African Americans and White Americans, to remove all social discriminations. His words were so powerful that he was able to rally the support of millions of Americans and was even awarded the Nobel Peace Prize in 1964. If he had not been as influential as he was, it is without a doubt that his “dream” would have easily gone unheard, thus we can see how instrumental one’s influence on the masses is. </p>

<p>Lastly, a leader has to have a strong sense of justice. Given the immense power and trust they hold, leaders have to make the correct decisions morally and not give in to the temptations of corruption and money laundering. From examples such as Sophie Mubarak of Egypt, we can see how easily the masses would lose trust in these previously highly accalimed leaders, causing them to lose the support of the masses and causing them to turn on these “leaders”.</p>

<p>In conclusion, from the analysis of succesful and unsuccesful leaders of the past and present, we can see that foresight, influence and morality are 3 very vital qualities that a leader must possess.</p>

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<p>Ok last one, I promise!
(Yeah I know 3 isn’t "a couple hehe, so gonna fail Math section xP )</p>

<p>Essay 3:
Can knowledge be a burden rather than a benefit? </p>

<p>The 21st Century has ushered in a watershed of technological advancements and with it came the burgeoning of informational technology as people from all over the world become more informed and this has also complemented our pursuit of knowledge, further enhancing our intelligence. However, is knowledge necessarily a good thing? I personally feel that knowledge can be considered a burden at times, evident from the pervasive examples in literature such as the Animal Farm and also historcal examples of Emily of Emerald Hill and lastly also in fields of sciences. </p>

<p>In the world reknowned novel The Animal Farm by George Orwell, the animals on the farm had had enough of tolling for the farmer and decided to revolt under the leadership of Snowball. As a results the animals were able to enjoy an ephemeral life of freedom. However, this was short-lived in that another group of pigs on the farm were plotting to manipulate their new found freedom to the pigs’ advantage. The astute Snowball was able to see through these pigs’ ploys and had gained knowledge of the devious schemes. Having acquired this knowledge, Snowball was coerced into stopping these pigs but was burdened as to how he would go about doing so, however, due to his panic, the pigs were able to convince the animals that Snowball was deranged and succesfully drove him out. Hence we can see that knowledge can be at times a burden as it may cause you to carry out drastic actions, if not carefully thought through. </p>

<p>Secondly, in this world full of knowledge, one may be burdened by having too much knowledge or rather knowledge one is not supposed to possess. Back in World War II, Emily Li, a young Singaporean then was captured by the Japanese soldiers after being caught listening in on some of their conversations. It was later found that she was working for Singaporean intel group to find out secrets of the Japanese army. However, because she had so much knowledge, the Japanese tortured her to spill the beans on the rest of the intelligence members. However, her lips were sealed and she was eventually able to escape their clutches. After the horrifying even, she published her experiences in her autobiography Emily of Emerald Hill, where she stated “Knowledge too much almost costed me my life!” Thus we can see, knowledge may put one at risk in today’s modern world where classified informations highly crucial. </p>

<p>Lastly, this also applies to the scientific world. World reknowned oncologist Doctor John Wilks wrote in a publication of The Nature about his experience as a doctor. He shared that often times, doctors have knowledge that often bother them, for example the glum prognosis of a young child, but yet they do not always share them due to the nature of such news, hence burdening these doctors themselves. Hence such knowledge can be a great burden. </p>

<p>In conclusion, I concede that knowledge can be a great burden. At times it is better to have less knowledge thus decreasing one’s burden.</p>

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<p>Sorry for the post spammage >.< (Hope I wont get banned for this )
Anyways as you can see my essay standards have really dropped as compared to my previous works here:
<a href=“http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/sat-preparation/1278376-could-you-grade-my-essay.html[/url]”>http://talk.collegeconfidential.com/sat-preparation/1278376-could-you-grade-my-essay.html&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p&gt;

<p>Anyways do any of you have any examples for these prompts cause I found it really hard to come up with examples for these 3 and had to fake a couple of them… especially literary ones, as you can see I’ve only used Animal Farm and it really frustrates me </p>

<p>So yep, shall stop posting, would really be happy if you could just drop me a number for my essay(s) [any one will do] if you dont have any comments Thank you! :D</p>

[bwtrumpet]

<p>BUMP, anyone? Freaking out now heh :/</p>

[EricSnow]

<p>You used “I”, “personally”, a rhetorical question and stuff… Your introduction should be more concise and direct. Agree disagree? Establish fast… But idk… Also you should totally have used that French guy who said that it I the citizens job to overthrow a bad government in the conclusion or whatever/whoever said it…</p>

[bwtrumpet]

<p>True haha, I tend to ramble on my introductions…
And true that guy should come in handy! Thank you!</p>

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