essay on RISKY/taboo topic

Colleges and Universities A-Z University of Chicago ✅
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<p>I just finished my essay, and the topic is on an experience i had that will make me stand out (i mean it), but i think it's a bit risky since it may come off as if i'm trying to elicit pity of some sort.</p>

<p>But anyway, despite not having edited it much yet, I think it's pretty good so far. I probably won't be able to have any of my english teachers critique it, so I'd love your comments.</p>

<p>I first posted this on the general college essays board, but I hardly had any luck. I'll PM it to those who are interested. It is longer than the typical essay, so please only comment if you plan to actually READ IT and RESPOND. Preferably college students/parents/teachers, but all are welcome.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>ill read it. PM it to me. i got accepted early action, so I know what they're looking for.</p>

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<p>PM it to me as well, I'll check it out fer ya</p>

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<p>"i got accepted early action, so I know what they're looking for."</p>

<p>That's quite possibly the most pretentious statement I've heard on CC in a long while...</p>

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<p>art_star,</p>

<p>go ahead and pm me.</p>

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<p>i don't care if it's pretentious. lots of students are like that. deal with it.</p>

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<p><em>blink</em></p>

<p>...I make enemies too quickly. CC is arrogance squared...</p>

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<p>agreed....</p>

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<p>I'm confused about the claim that "lots of students are like that." Is this supposed to imply that lots of students are pretentious, which I don't know whether or not that is true, but that is also irrelevant. The point I think thricedotted attempted to make was that just because one is accepted early-action at Chicago does not qualify one to say what the admissions office looks for in an essay. I am a student here and I certainly wouldn't think I know what to look for in an applcation essay, partly because that isn't my job, and I seriously doubt anyone else, excepting of course those who work in the admissions office, would try to say they know exactly what Chicago looks for in an essay.</p>

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<p>what they look for in an essay - sincerity, spirit, truth, and a spark of creativity
is it not pretentious to make a whole website just for essays named after yourself?</p>

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<p>^ Then why didn't you give them that advice in the beginning? Isn't that what we all knew as prospies, too?</p>

<p>Matthew Chang's domain happened to be matthewchang.com; he didn't go out and buy a domain specifically to share essays on, which makes perfect sense. People refer to it by his name because they remember his domain.</p>

<p>If you're going to try to cover your behind with similar examples of arrogance, you could at least pick one that made sense. Me, for instance.</p>

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<p>so you agree that you're an example of arrogance? thanks. that makes my job a lot easier.</p>

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<p>I got deffered, so I know kind of what they're looking for.</p>

<p>Any denied applicants want to read this to tell OP what they're not looking for?</p>

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<p>pm it if you want, but I haven't applied yet, but I've got a rough draft of my essay already.</p>

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<p>you can pm it to me if you want...i'm a third year but i still remember the application process and my own essays.</p>

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<p>You can PM it to me as well if you want.</p>

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<p>I'm interested in reading it if you still need comments.</p>

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<p>PM it to me, I'll check it out.</p>

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<p>don't mean to start this up all over again, but just because you got in early action, or last year it doesn't mean you have access to the UChicago adcom's application scoring system's innermost secrets the moment you get your letter. </p>

<p>you can't just say you 'know' what they're looking for because if there's something you should've learnt from this whole college application ordeal, it's that adcoms perform the function of building a CLASS, not merely playing metal detector and checking if you're clean enough to get in.</p>

<p>they look at the bigger picture. and so must you, ArielTriton.</p>

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<p>no need to look at the bigger picture. ive read so many previous essays that yeah, I do know what they're looking for.</p>