<p>In the future, I want to be a business manager and possibly a CEO of a major company. However, it is nearly impossible to achieve this without higher education. The University of Chicago can provide me with the opportunity to prepare myself for this career. I have developed a passion for business ever since I took a business class in school, and business comes easy to me. I would be a great addition to the student body as I can bring my experience and leadership skills here. Learning at the Chicago Booth School of Business would enhance my knowledge of the economy and build up my skills to manage a business to meet its economic and social goals. Also, the opportunity to intern for a business internationally is a huge opportunity that not every school offers, and enrolling in the Tauck Scholars Program will allow me to do that and broaden my exIn the end, getting a business major from UChicago would make me highly competitive in job candidate pools. UChicago can offer me the knowledge and experience I need to successfully achieve my future career, and I want the opportunity to earn the knowledge and experience.</p>
<p>"Also, the opportunity to intern for a business internationally is a huge opportunity that not every school offers, and enrolling in the Tauck Scholars Program will allow me to do that and broaden my exIn the end, getting a business major from UChicago would make me highly competitive in job candidate pools." - This sentence will probably destroy my chances. One, it's incomplete, and two, I mention a program from ANOTHER SCHOOL (Lehigh) as this was a template essay that I switched up a little. I just applied and I missed these mistakes, so I'm wondering how bad this is going to affect my chances.</p>
<p>Are you applying to graduate school at the UChicago Booth School of Business or to the undergraduate College?</p>
<p>Part of this sounds as though you’re applying for the MBA program, but then you go on to say “business major” so I think you are applying to college (you wouldn’t speak of “majoring” in Business when applying to an MBA program, since that’s a given)… </p>
<p>It is true that you can take classes as an undergraduate at the Business School through the Chicago Careers in Business program or whatever the name is, but if you speak of majoring in business as opposed to economics, you will probably scare the Admissions Office and alums.</p>
<p>I’m sorry to say you may have committed a few faux pas here. But you are indeed correct that booth UChicago undergrad and Booth Business School are excellent choices.</p>
<p>From what I can tell, the Tauck Scholars program is for undergraduates, signifying that you’re probably an undergraduate yourself.</p>
<p>This means that in addition to talking about how much you’d enjoy another University’s program, you talked about how your ideal college major is one the University doesn’t offer. UChicago’s college (which, by the way, is what you’re applying to; not the Booth School, which is for graduates) runs on a liberal arts philosophy, precluding majors in business, nursing, dentistry, or other pre-professional disciplines. What this tells me is that you don’t know very much about UChicago, and the admissions office will probably take the same thing from your essay.</p>
<p>You can try sending them an updated essay, but they’ve already received this one and I can’t see somebody getting accepted with an essay like this. On the bright side, you probably didn’t want to come here anyway, since we don’t have the major you want.</p>
<p>Even if your SAT and GPA were in the 75% plus percentile an essay like this will most certainly hurt your chances of getting in. As the other members have pointed out the University of Chicago doesn’t offer an undergraduate business school, which shows the University of Chicago admissions officers that you did not do your homework when you looked at the University of Chicago.</p>
<p>Since it is still before the deadline I would suggest correcting your mistake(s) and see if you can resend it. If not I would send an email to their admissions office to see if they will allow you to submit a new supplemental application after the deadline.</p>
<p>I say let this go – your chances of admission are almost zero at this point and Chicago doesn’t seem like the school you’d attend anyway. </p>
<p>Also, your essay is too broad/generic – try focusing on a specific reason WHY you want to major in business, and drive home that reason. Perhaps relate that reason to an EC. Your current essay could fit the “Why ____” prompt of just about any university, minus the specific program details, which is not what you want your essay to be.</p>
<p>Admissions will read this and see someone who would not fit in and would not be willing to attend UChicago. And if this essay is anything to go on, they’d be right. If you thought this would work for UChicago even with the correct name and major, you must not know that much about the school. Nothing too bad about that, just forget it and move on.</p>
<p>How about just emailing UChicago admissions and asking them to replace the essay with something else? For my Common App I accidentally attached my additional information in the personal statement section and then sent it out to Vanderbilt. I emailed them with the proper personal statement and they seemed fine with it.</p>