<p>Hey CC,
I'm writing a general essay for both the Common App and for Georgetown. Indecisive as I am, I can't decide on which topic to pursue; I have several in mind, but I'm just interested in which one you guys think would be better. Any constructive criticism is appreciated as well.</p>
<p>Ideas for Personal Statements: </p>
<p>Logistics:
- Centered around logistics. Analyzing how, underlying every event, are countless hours of planning and coordination. How so much happens behind the scenes to make anything work out. Details, details, details can derail an entire schedule. And how it's trained me to become a critical problem solver
- It'd be based off of my experience in JROTC conducting the events for a Brigade of a thousand cadets, organizing first aid training seminars for teachers, faculty, and students, and either my work experience (intern for Sen., working at Levi's) or my experience coordinating a community service project in Nicaragua.
- I'm fairly sure I could make this an interesting essay, but it's somewhat detached from myself. </p>
<p>Culture:
- This one, I fear, is overdone. It would be contrasting the culture and religious beliefs of me and my parents, which has allowed me to see from varying perspectives. I think this would appeal more towards Georgetown (values diversity, interreligious understanding, etc.). The problem is that, again, it may be somewhat cliche. </p>
<p>Weight Loss (Overcoming challenge):
- I wrote this one for my UC application.
- It starts with a scene in middle school, where I was beaten to the point of a concussion by my classmates -- all for being overweight. I then go on about how that motivated me to want to lose weight (to stop the harassment), leading me to join the (blank) Team.
If you can imagine boot camp, that's essentially what the (blank) do. It was this hardship that helped form lasting bonds with my teammates. The climax of all this is, during the last day of our tryout phase, when my teammate collapsed on a run, and I ended up carrying him four miles back. I tied this in neatly with the start of the essay. I "needed a hand" to escape the bullying => my teammate "needed a hand" to get back up and pass our tryout phase.
- This one is more personal to myself, but it's much more storytelling than a personal statement. "More matter with less art"...</p>
<p>Thanks for taking the time to read this!</p>