<p>Hej guys, I have some doubts about about my application essays. Namely - they are quite lofty. Their topics are serious, their style is exalted - all of them. I don't know american mentality so well, but I think that evaluators like applicants to write in down-to-earch style, otherwise it sounds insincere for them.</p>
<p>The problem is - I actually AM lofty. I don't think about what I will eat for tommorow breakfast, I think about sources of humans morality, or disabled children instead. That is real me. And trying to write with a more approachable manner would be difficult and artificial in my case.</p>
<p>But they cannot know about it. Should I write about this in the "additional information" section? It would sound a bit like an excuse, but I realy want them to know that this moralistic tone is not an attempt to move them, but just me being myself.</p>
<p>I don’t think writing about it in additional info is going to do any good. People who are “lofty” all the time are pretty annoying IMHO. An admissions officer would rightly be put off by essays that are all platitudes and conceptual with no meat about your specific actions or feelings about an issue. You can have a broad perspective on the world, and still write an essay that is specific in anecdotes that demonstrate what you are like and how you bring more than just lofty ideas to the world. If you can’t come down off your perch in an essay, likely you also can’t in a classroom… at least that is how I would think if I were an admissions officer.</p>
<p>Oh, I wasn’t precise - they are specific and personal, and main point of each o them is a story from my life. Content is ok, I meant mostly that style is exalted. So my writing does not sound like speaking person, but more like prose or something. I cant help it, I just read much and that affect my writing manner.</p>