Fashion institute of technology Fall 2019 essay

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Hello! i am applying to the fashion institute of technology for menswear, for fall 2019. I wrote my essay which is 400 words (750 words needed) which i’m working on but i just need some advice on my essay. is it good so far? what should i add? obviously i have to fix grammar and capitalization. thanks!!!

“Ashley, Faites Attention! Pay attention please!” My french teacher had yelled at me for the third time. so many thoughts were racing in my head. it was impossible to pay attention when i had been thinking about this one particular thing, college. growing up with a learning disability always made me feel secluded, but on top with many other things. “in what though?” you may be asking, well linguistically and creatively. in middle school i tried to challenge and my thought racing brain with languages. i was able to teach myself spanish, italian, esperanto, and with much help from online and teachers, french and russian. i have always been intrigued with the history of countries and their languages. But how did i have the idea to get into the fashion industry? i had been doing much research on colleges from all over the united states, even including ones from around the globe. I used to believe that all anyone could ever do in college is study law, medical or work in an office or become a teacher. but i was definitely convinced that there was no such thing as studying fashion, but finding out that there are many opportunities to study fashion, it intrigued me greatly. so i did much research on the fashion industry and what it had to offer, especially in the men’s fashion industry. growing up my mind was simply bored and tired of trying to comprehend math and the sciences. i have always had much knowledge about fashion, linguistics and art. wanting to style myself, family and friends. photographing my garments and styles to compile a “magazine” to showcase my personal vision. being a young woman with many aspirations for men’s clothing and the world, i would love to execute my talents and ideas into a reality through attending the fashion institute of technology. i know this will give me the opportunity to design, travel, and strengthen my linguistics since there are minor language opportunities that the fashion institute of technology has to offer. Most importantly, being a perfect candidate. a perfect candidate to me is being a well rounded student. having multiple abilities and talents, as a student should have. i believe i will be able to execute my abilities like designing and creating many quality balanced clothing line while using my linguistic ability. since as we all know, fashion doesn’t speak just one language.

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here’s the essay prompt if anyone is wondering:

What makes you a perfect candidate for FIT? Why are you interested in the major you are applying to? The essay is also your chance to tell us more about your experiences, activities and accomplishments. (No more than 750 words, please.

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Hi Ashyrest! My son is a junior at FIT and here’s my feedback for what it’s worth:

  • Love the opening line - it’s attention-getting.
  • Eliminate the parts about how you don’t like math and science. There will be a good bit of both in menswear at FIT (calculating fabric pricing/margins/statistics for math and things like textile manufacturing for science) and they want to see that you can do these
  • I would make it more of a story. After the part about how the French teacher asks you to pay attention, I would then go into perhaps some information about how you were busy thinking about French fashion phrases and lost track of the grammar she was discussing. Maybe then talk about the first time you noticed a well-cut men’s suit and started sketching menswear thereafter, and then you started a fashion club at school, etc. Show the progression of your interest from day one and how FIT will help you nail down that interest more
  • A “perfect candidate” at FIT is someone who lives and breathes fashion and is open to new and innovative ideas, so mention that there’s really nowhere else you could see yourself that will allow you to collaborate with other fashion-minded people and where you can share and test ideas, etc. That you want to see how other people think and learn from their ideas just as much as you want to share your own.
    Good luck to you!
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It doesn’t speak to any experience that makes you a good fit. I agree that saying math and science don’t interest you (and the sidetrack intolanguages) doesn’t show how you “live and breathe” fashion, which includes creating, not just enjoying. You do make this interest sound like an alternative to conventional academics, not a true drive. It’s also tricky to admit you didn’t know one could study fashion.

The college wants to know how you’re the right choice for their program, what you bring. Not why you feel this could be interesting. Do you have experience designing or making men’s fashion? In fact, have you ever actually crafted a piece or done a sketchbook? That doesn’t show.

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@CCEdit_Torrey Thank you!! this has helped me a lot and will definelty use your sons and your advice

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@lookingforward hey! thank you so much for your feedback. yes u have made many sketches and have made garmets. i didn’t really realize how i haven’t even wrote about that. thanks for your advice and i will definelty use it