Grade my essay please? - first time posting this type of thread

<p>The Chinese philosopher, Confucius, once wrote in his 'Analects' that "the thoughts of the mind exist only for one reason: to be expressed." This quote directly relates to the fact that thoughts should not be confined to one's mind. Several relevant examples can be drawn up to express this idea.</p>

<p>Half a century ago, in the city of Lodz, Poland, lived a man who was soon to become president. Lech Kaczynski was raised in this city, and all his life adored politics. Had he not expressed his thoughts on the construction of the new radio station KPZ several years earlier, he might as well have forgotten about the presidency. Kaczynski spoke out and shared his feeling about the community. He let Poland know that a new radio station was needed, and it's construction would encourage entertainment. Soon after it was actually constructed, several more competing stations popped up in the metropolitan area. It would sure have been similar to hiding his feelings if he had not said a word about the radio station. </p>

<p>Years ago, a friend, John, once asked someone if they knew that so and so liked him. it turned out to be true; his speculations were confirmed. John was no longer worried to be around the person who liked him, since the feeling was mutual! When John asked the other person to go on a date, she gladly accepted. Had John not been honest about his feelings and expressed them, John would not have a girlfriend right now. It just goes to show that one must express his or her feelings, but not to the point of total release, in order to advance in life. This does not, however, mean that one must spill out all their secrets to the world.</p>

<p>Isoroku Yamamoto, a character in the Japanese poem, 'Mt. Fuji and Her,' expresses his feelings about his father's recent death. Isoroku longs for his father, and cries at his lover's shoulder. He expresses joyful memories that were shared at a time when his father was youthful, and Isoroku was free of worry. Isoroku needed this time with his lover. He had to express his feelings to their highest extent. He needed to move on with his life, but before he did that, life needed to take its course. In the end, Isoroku accepted his father's saddening death, and settled with his lover to whom he expressed all his intimate thoughts. </p>

<p>Another proverb from Confucius' 'Analects' says "the mind is like a butterfly, flying from one flower to the next." This can be interpreted as the mind is something that is constantly expressing itself on many things. Thoughts must be expressed, indeed, and one must not hold back in risk of missing out on advice or the like. The mind is not a jail for thoughts; it is more like a quarry of them.</p>

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<p>I would like to know what a score would be, and I would love an opinion from you CCers.</p>

<p>What’s the prompt?</p>

<p>sorry. </p>

<p>the prompt (I couldn’t copy and paste)
can be found here after you click ‘Print
Test.’ [Free</a> SAT Practice Test - Prepare for the SAT](<a href=“http://sat.collegeboard.com/practice/sat-practice-test]Free”>http://sat.collegeboard.com/practice/sat-practice-test)
It’s just the free online practice test one.</p>

<p>bump please?</p>

<p>oh come on. anyone??</p>

<p>please? lol</p>