grade my essay please?

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<p>prompt from an sat prep class</p>

<p>Is art or any other work of imagination such as literature, music, or film, unique to its time or is it universal? Write an essay that explains your views on this issue.. etc etc etc</p>

<pre><code> Listening to lecture after lecture in my AP Art History class has made me aware of one definite thing: art is timeless. Works of art from Ancient Rome had influenced artists like Michaelangelo and Da Vinci centuries after the society that manufactured such art perished. While a society might not last forever, the art produced by it remains a symbol of beauty and culture left to be forever pondered by the ages.
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<p>The Ancient Romans focused on implementing three major virtues in their works of art: harmony, balance, and beauty. These three characteristics are most evident in the scuplture Doryphoros (spearbearer) done by Polykleitos in the early 5th century bce. It was known as the canon throughout the Greek peninsula and surrounding territories, and is still a recognizable statue in most western societies today. The techniques used in this work of art wasn't limited to the parameters of that period; aspects of the mathematical ratios and painstakingly hard-to-follow virtues used in the construction of that classical masterpiece can be seen in modern statues today around the world.</p>

<p>Through art, we can experience the emotions, triumphs, and ordeals of cultures long ago. Art is not only universal in its message and appeal but also universal in time and speaks to all people of the human race.</p>

<p>tell me where i can improve on please
p.s. after looking back and reading through it again, some parts rlly didnt make any sense =[</p>

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<p>First of the all, the structure of the essay is so wierd plus the fact that there’s no transition between first and second paragraph that it makes it seem as if the first paragraph is a body paragraph, and that there is no introduction. </p>

<p>You don’t expand enough upon your one example. Usually when people only use one example they make it really long.</p>

<p>You have nice details in your body paragraph, but they don’t support the prompt enough. YOu need to connect them to the prompt better. First your’re talking about the art, then about the mathematical ratios of teh art?? I thought you were going to talk about the harmony, balance, and beauty’s relation to today’s art. Why did you state it in your topic sentence??</p>

<p>Haha, last sentence doesn’t make a lot of sense. </p>

<p>Overall, you need to explain soem of the things u mention. For example, " painstakingly hard-to-follow virtues used in the construction of that classical masterpiece". What are these virtues? It sounds like ur misusing the word or that it applies to something else becvause you don’t explain it. </p>

<p>Grade: High 7- Low 8</p>