<p>Hey guys ... could you please grade my essay and tell me what to work on ? The e-rater gave me a 6/6 .... but I dont really trust it.Any help is largely appreciated.</p>
<p>Prompt:
Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.</p>
<p>We need to remember that wisdom is not just about what we think or know, but more importantly, how we act. Simply being smart is not enough. I define wisdom as the application of intelligence and experience toward the attainment of a common good. In other words, the wisest people are those who look out not just for themselves but also for others.</p>
<p>Adapted from Robert J. Sternberg, Teaching for Wisdom in Our Schools</p>
<p>Assignment:
What makes a person wise? Are the wisest people merely smart or are they also concerned with the well-being of others? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
<p>Your Response
A wise man once said , "A friend in need is a friend indeed". A wise person always finds a way to help or advise those in need.He uses his astuteness for a greater cause than just for his own aims. </p>
<p>Wisdom is the application of intelligence and experience toward the attainment of a common good. In other words, the wisest people are those who look out not just for themselves but also for others. </p>
<p>Wisdom can also be defined as a deep understanding and realization of people, things, events or situations, resulting in the ability to apply perceptions, judgements and actions in keeping with this understanding.It logically follows that wise people are not merely smart , but are also concerned with the well being of others and betterment of society. Wisdom is not just about what we think or know, but more importantly, how we act. Simply being smart is not enough. </p>
<p>Wise persons are generally learned and have a good perception of society.What sets them apart from other intelligent and smart people is that they think of society as a whole and apply their knowledge in the betterment of society.In Indian villages,old men and women are considered wise.They may not be as learned as their western counterparts,but have a good perception of society and they know what improvements it needs and how those improvements can be brought about. </p>
<p>Wisdom comes with experience of life.We cannot learn about life by going to school and taking a crash course in wisdom.Wisdom is achieved only by experiencing life as a whole and learning from the mistakes committed not only by us but also those mistakes that tend to repeat themselves over time. </p>
<p>Smart people generally have a textbook understanding of life and do not have the strength of character shown by wise people in the face of adversity.During troubling times,a smart person tends to think for himself,but wise people generally manage to extricate himself as well as others from the threatening situation with the application of his gained experience,which most smart people lack. </p>
<p>Some people attain a status of wisdom at a young age,having experienced more in their life than others have.These people are characterized by helpfulness,wittiness and general outlook on life. </p>
<p>Hence , wise people are those who help others by using their intelligence not only to serve their own ends but by also keeping in mind the improvement of society.</p>