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<p>I would appreciate any guesses on the score I received. I'm simply trying to compare the mindset of the graders to the members of college confidential. I am well aware of mistakes and I don't necessarily need a critique as much as a concrete number. </p>

<p>Prompt 2</p>

<p>Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below.</p>

<p>Whether it is a child pouting to get ice cream or a politician using emotionally charged language to influence potential supporters, all people use some form of acting to achieve whatever ends they seek. Public figures of all kinds would have short, unsuccessful careers without the aid of acting. Acting—consciously assuming a role in order to achieve some purpose—is a tool people use to protect their interests and gain advantages in every aspect of life.</p>

<p>Adapted from Marlon Brando, Foreword to The Technique of Acting by Stella Adler</p>

<p>Assignment:</p>

<p>Is acting an essential part of everyday life? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

<p>It is not only celebrities who must assume different roles constantly. This multitude of charades one takes on is an act of its own. It is, in essence, a form of rhetoric, the art of persuasion. Day to day, individuals must act accordingly by being polite and thus adapt to the decorum of the situation. Others, like politicians, adjust to socially incorporate themselves and win support of a large body of people. Essentially, we are constantly acting on a daily basis, making what fundamentally are rhetorical appeals which we employ to develop our credibility</p>

<p>Conforming to the decorum or “rules of conduct” is an affair entailing the assumption of a day-to-day role. A prime exemplar of this scenario can be extrapolated from the very schools responsible for our education. In many of these institutions, students are mandated to forgo brash behavior and impulsiveness. Students, as a result, conform to a mode of quiet politeness. Additionally, with mandatory uniforms in select cases, students part with their preferred attire and assume a façade of homogeneity. The student, while at times not preferring to adapt to such rules on one hand, proceeds to avoid trouble on the other, climbing into the good graces of the faculty. Indeed, it is those who assume this politeness that are often given favor. The fundamental avoidance of punishment is, in fact, an almost subconscious method to elevate the child in the eyes of the faculty and student body.</p>

<p>The prevalence and importance of day-to-day acting seems more obvious in the political spectrum. Politicians often assume a confident and commanding air often citing credentials and qualifications as an ethical appeal. These individuals will often appeal in a pathological aspect by “acting” in accordance with people’s emotions Specifically, this is observed in the charged language and impassioned speeches targeting terrorists in order to garner popular support. The politicians do not even necessarily support their own words, but act constantly to be included and supported.</p>

<p>Fundamentally, acting is an integral and incessant facet of life. Whether one conforms to rules to gain favor or bends the truth and appeals to ethos and/or pathos, it is often and act. Acting is essentially hard wired into human beings and society and is, when it boils down to it, an art of persuasion</p>

<p>10 or 11… well written. Conclusion is weak. Slight misspellings… I wouldn’t use the same example the question used about politicians to support your opinion. Over use of jargon… </p>

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<p>I actually laughed out loud reading that…</p>

<p>such flowery language… after a while this just looks like an SAT vocab book… good examples though but the jargon really gets to be too much. id give it a 10</p>

<p>Thank you for the replies. I would like to add that the vocabulary is not what I have learned from SAT vocabulary, which I didn’t study at all, but rather the natural way I write. Superfluity is almost ingrained into my writing unfortunately. I am not trying to come off as pretentious. ON another note, this is an actual December 2008 SAT essay which I simply transposed onto word and am now posting here. Just a few more replies would be appreciated.</p>

<p>grandiloquent. Do you know the definition of that one?</p>

<p>Haha yes…but really, I bet there are those who exemplify that word to a greater extreme than I could ever do.</p>

<p>^ you’re ********ting me, no one talks like this</p>

<p>I don’t have to talk like this to write like this. Tell me does your verbal expression of language always match your written expression? Anyway, if we could please get back on topic of scoring. I’ll post the actual score after a couple more numbers come in.</p>

<p>The way I write in this forum is actually the same way I speak…</p>

<p>A 10. But the 10 doesn’t belong to you, because you wouldn’t be able to write this in 25 minutes without a thesaurus.</p>

<p>This IS my essay from the December 2008 essay(ACTUAL SAT TEST/NOT PRACTICE 800/760/720). And no, it does not need a thesarus. Anyway…the score wasn’t far off…I received a 9…Missed one on the multiple choice, which, with a vicious curve brought me down to a 760 in that section.</p>

<p>your vocabulary is going to be my nightmare tonight =) i am expecting to see at least 10.000words which are going to be flying around my mind =)</p>

<p>actually, i am not qualified to judge your essay because i am not a native. but, i have been reading essays more than 10 daily and your vocabulary is the huqest that i have ever seen. although your vocab. seems complicated, if you are able to use it accuretely, this will be your advantage and i think this is your advantage.</p>

<p>other than this, you can easily hit 10 points. (conclusion seems a little bit weak)</p>

<p>Its not that pompous in my opinion, I write in a manner similar to this.</p>

<p>But that being said I think you need to try to incorporate more specific examples. This is more thoughtful than what the SAT essay would like to see.</p>

<p>I agree that the examples aren’t that specific. The essays I have read that received 12’s used very specific examples. Citing literary characters, historical figures or even someone you know who had to “act” would have improved your essay. I would say this is a 10.</p>