Help! Can someone please read my essay?

<p>As the title says, I need help with my essay. Never had to write one before so it would be great if someone could read it and give me some advice on how to improve it. Thanks in advance</p>

<p>bump, please would someone read my draft and give me an opinion on it?</p>

<p>do u mind that im a senior?</p>

<p>if u arent applying to any schools that i am, ill read it</p>

<p>PM me. I read, advise, but not edit. Search on me to see if you like my comments.</p>