<p>I need help with my essays. I am currently studying abroad in Egypt, thus i have no help to look for the grammatical errors. Please help! </p>
<p>This is for the professor you would like to research with question:</p>
<p>Choosing is literally impossible when it comes to the staff of the University of Pennsylvania. I believe that 5 stars and michael phelps 8 gold medals should be awarded to each and everyone of them.The professors at Penn are some of the most prestigious and acclaimed in the nation. The wide range of interesting research projects and courses of study can enrich me in every possible way. Even though, my principal interest is in international relations, studying with professor Dennis Deturch in mathematics or professor Joel Waldfogel in business will be an extra asset for me. With a school of your caliber any, and i mean ANY proffesor would be a delight to work with . The knowledge and experience they can give me is one I strive for and hope to accomplish in my time attending your universit</p>
<p>An overwhlemed applicant :s</p>
<p>Hmm there are some grammatical errors in this... "I believe that 5 stars and Michael Phelps's 8 gold medals" is right and it's professor, not proffesor. And also... this essay is meant for you to give INSIGHT as to why you want to study/do research with a specific professor. Praising Penn will get you nowhere in this one... tell them WHY Prof. Deturch/Prof. Waldfogel intrigue you.
And the 5 stars/Michael Phelps line is overwhelmingly cheesy.
Sorry to trash your essay, but I feel it'll help you.</p>
<p>"With a school of your caliber any, and i mean ANY proffesor would be a delight to work with"</p>
<p>^^I would avoid using "your" in this scenario and would possibly change it to "With a school of THIS caliber". Also, it's professor, not proffesor :P</p>
<p>"Even though, my principal interest"</p>
<p>^^ No comma necessary.</p>
<p>"The knowledge and experience they can give me is one I strive for and hope to accomplish in my time attending your universit"</p>
<p>^^ You list two things (knowledge and experience) but later say "...is one I strive for..." You could say instead "...are two attributes I strive for..." or something similar.</p>
<p>I know I missed some, but I hope these suggestions help. Good luck!</p>
<p>thanks soo much! chandlerbing, i havent written english for 5 months so it sucks now. Thanks for the help, np closeboy39. thnks also</p>
<p>I can totally understand, but you might want to change your content more than the writing itself. Penn already knows that Penn rox people's sox :)</p>
<p>yes. im going to change the whole essay in itself. Thanks!</p>